Ashley needs a little more dirt on her, and I think she is going to have a decline in her behavior because no character is truly pure, and her ultimate goals are to provide for her mother and be successful in a crumbling society.
I also worked on my collection based on Adam Gottlieb's awesome feedback. The ending of the story I was revising is clearer and ends on a more uplifting note. However, I am still struggling with paring down some of the side stories, which my fiction tends to be riddled with and could confuse readers. Riddled is, perhaps, too strong a word. The side stories are very present.
I am also looking for someone to edit my long short story too, and I am going to ask my friend Erik Allen Yankee to help me post it online to Smash Words and Amazon or wherever. I know he is busy with his own writing and smut hustle, but I hope to pester him before I go on vacation.
And on that note, have a Happy Thanksgiving! Be grateful for your love of words and ability to read!
Write and revise. #Resist